重点预习范围：

1. In some countries, parents expect children to spend long time studying in and after school and have less free time. Do you think it has positive or negative effects on children and society that they live in? （教育）

2. Medical services should be run by profit-making companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?（健康）

3. Nowadays some countries encourage people to buy more and more products, which is good for economy. While others believe it is bad for the society.

Discuss both views and give your opinion. （经济）

4. Some people prefer to help or support directly in the local community for people who need it; however, others prefer to give money to the national or private charities. Discuss both views and give your own opinions. （社会）

5. Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?（环境）

次重点预习范围：

1. Scientists advise people to lead a healthy lifestyle, but most people continue with unhealthy activities. Why do you think it is and what can do with it?（健康）

2. Many customs and traditional ways of behaviors are no longer relevant to the modern life and no worth keeping. Do you agree or disagree?（文化）

3. In many cities, an increasing number of people do not know their neighbors, and they lack a sense of community. What are the causes? How to solve this problem?（社会）

4. In some countries, the criminal trials are shown on the TV and the general public can watch them. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?（犯罪）

5. The world has many towns and cities constructed in previous centuries that are suitable and livable for people in those times. What problems will this cause today and what can be done to solve them?（社会）

6. Some people think getting old is all bad, while others think the life of elderly people in modern world is better than that in the past. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.（社会）

7. In modern society, ambition is more and more important. How important is ambition for being successful in life? Is ambition a positive or negative characteristic?（社会）

8. Some people think the government should spend money to look for life on other planets, others think it is a waste of public money, because there are other problems unsolved on earth. Discuss both view and give your own opinion. （政府）

9. Many young people leave school with negative attitudes towards learning. Why? What can be done to encourage a positive attitude to learning in young people?（教育）

10. In some countries around the world men and women are having babies late in life. What are the reasons? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?（社会）

考生习作批改展示--主体段落（持续更新中！）

题目：Some people say that drug companies have the responsibility to spend money on researching medicine to help the poorer countries, while others think the main responsibility of drug companies is to make money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

For the supporters of the first opinion, the drug companies are enterprises that produce drugs（重复，改为remedies), which could save billions of lives. (可增加衔接，This means that) They can ~~also~~ light up the hope of the poor or unhealthy people (补充if they can kindly give some support to the latter for free).(对于poor这个点需要进行一些拓展，为什么贫困地区会需要药物。例如--贫困地区由于缺乏卫生设施而常有传染病--since（由于） underdeveloped places such as the rural often suffer from infectious diseases due to poor sanitation and the lack of medical equipment.) It seems that those drug companies must do something charitable and every entrepreneur of them aims at contributing（表达不恰当，改为every entrepreneur of them should aim at making contribution).（此处可分段） Clearly, however, it is not reasonable or even possible. （描述性语言，未得到论证。拓展论证可参考：Given the potential exorbitant cost of financing the disadvantaged as well as achieving any breakthrough in scientific research, it is not practical for every drug company to sacrifice their profit since they still have their own employees and other spending to look after. Another problem arising is that it would be difficult to judge how much a corporation should devote to the charity and this would cause a waste of resource and effort in supervising the proper distribution and avoiding corruption.）

题目：Lectures were used to be a way to teach large number of students, but with the technology available for education, there is no longer justification for lectures. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

People’s opinions differ (over) whether lectures are good way(s)(或改为still necessary) to give(可升级为deliver) education（或把give education改为impart knowledge) due to(改为considering更恰当） the popularity of modern technology, like internet and computers. While there are some benefits of using online learning.(不需要断句，while是连词,但前后的转折关系不强，可以考虑使用因果连词） I still believe that we should combine classroom-based learning and remote learning.

（开头段修改后：Opinions differ over whether lectures are still necessary to impart knowledge considering the popularity of online learning. Since the benefits of technology do exist, I advocate that education institutes should incorporate distance learning into classroom-based one so that the effects of the two can be optimized. ）

On the one hand, there are some reasons why online(可替换为computer-assisted) learning plays a very important role in education（可以具体化为can better facilitate students’ understanding). It is obvious that this learning mode bring(s)（更常使用offers/allows) great flexibility. Through this way,(可改为in that,合并两句话，减少简单句的比例） students can adjust their learning concepts and pace according to their abilities rather than struggle to keep pace with teachers in physical classes(有歧义，一般意为体育课，改为traditional classrooms). Furthermore, （补充the) internet is able to provide students with a large amount of videos, figures and musics（music不可数）, which is far more interesting and attractive(缺乏比较对象，需补充than lectures). It make(s) the process of learning easier, and students tend to(可改为might) spend more time on study (of their own accord--自愿地).

（主体段修改后：On the one hand, computer assisted learning can better facilitate students’ understanding than traditional lectures. This technological mode allows great flexibility(也可使用provides individualized experience) in that users can adjust their pace according to their abilities rather than struggle to catch up with others or feel bored with the slow progress in the class. Furthermore, the internet can offer access to numerous videos, pictures and music, thereby diversifying learning process to best motivate student’s curiosity. As a result, learners might spend more time on study of their own accord. ）

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